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A fractured laugh
A broken word
You're losing grasp
And breaking hard

A tragic smile
A half told lie
A constant trial
Not to cry

A hidden past
A dismal life
A question asked
Rehearsed reply

What are those scars?
What happened then?
What is your past?
You got those when?

You're the abused
You're the struck down
Broken by fools
And scarred by hands

Can't hold it in
Can't keep it up
Crying victim
You've had enough
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pinkyrani Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow the 2nd verse really got to me. Good job.
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011  Student General Artist
This has taken me forever to reply to, but, thank you! I'm really glad you liked it, and I really like that verse too =)
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amazinglyashlynn13 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
That is how I feel in a relationship. How can I help you? But it seems I picked people who didn't want help. I feel like a doctor sometimes. Then I remember I can't stand blood and guts. I just want to fix people. Give everyone puppies like Oprah or something
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Gary-thedreamingpoet Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2011  Professional Writer
Deep and powerful, I like it :)
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you very much.
I really appreciate receiving comments, it's always helpful and it motivates me to write more.
Thank you for adding it to your favourites too.
Glad you liked it =)
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Gary-thedreamingpoet Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2011  Professional Writer
You're welcome :)
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annepam Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2011
awesome.. nice intensity
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you, I'm glad you like it =)
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lyricmedlie Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2011  Student Writer
very beautiful, darling
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you very much =)
Glad you liked it!
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lyricmedlie Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2011  Student Writer
Of course! I loved this very very much! Beautiful piece ♥
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Pishkin Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2011
A hidden past
A dismal life
A question asked
Rehearsed reply

I love this part. It's so strong.
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you, I was really quite pleased with how this one came out.
Glad you liked it =)
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createdwithpassion Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
a bit intense. like it :D
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you ... Yeah, it's pretty dark, good way to let out all the sad and angry though =)
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createdwithpassion Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
to true. and welcome :)
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Sartosis Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2011  Student Writer
A tragic smile
A half told lie
A constant trial
Not to cry
Love that bit too. What an amazing poem.
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2011  Student General Artist
That's probably one of my favourite parts of it too.
Thank you very much, I'm glad you liked it.
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Sartosis Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2011  Student Writer
:)
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fidele7684 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2011  Student Filmographer
A tragic smile
A half told lie
A constant trial
Not to cry
my fave well written poet/actor
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you, glad you liked it. I really liked that bit too =)
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fidele7684 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2011  Student Filmographer
i really do:D
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