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The day that you died was the day I collapsed
I've stayed down on the floor
You're not coming back

If I never get up, then I can't fall again  
I miss you so much
The world took my friend

When I am alone I cry and I yell
They sent you to heaven
And left me in hell

And I need a friend right now most of all
But you are not here
There's no one to call

I was right there, the day that you died
Right next to you
On the passenger side

Your side it crumbled with you in its grasp
I don't know what happened
It went by far too fast

I was there the day you were put in the ground
So many people showed up
You would have been proud

Every day I can't believe you're still gone
When I visit you now
I play your favorite song

Sometimes I hope that you're looking down
My life is changing
And I hope that you're proud

Because knowing you, changed me so much more
You were my best friend
All through school and before

No one will replace you and the laughs that we had
Or the pranks that we pulled
That made our parents so mad

I'll always remember you and the person you were
How you couldn't play football
Even your drunken slur

We grew up together, we grew up as a pair
I'll meet you in heaven
Just as soon as I'm there
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dessy166 Featured By Owner May 15, 2011
That was an amazing poem. Very powerful.
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner May 16, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you very much, and thank you for the favourites also, I really appreciate it.
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dessy166 Featured By Owner May 16, 2011
No problem.
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Emotastic-chik5 Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
incredibly sad =( I love it
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you.
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Emotastic-chik5 Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Your welcome =)
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Soul-Reader Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2011   Writer
This is very moving...powerful words here. I'm sorry that this happened to you :heart:
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you, on all accounts, I really appreciate it.
I write about it a lot, and that has oddly helped, I'm just glad that people don't moan that I'm always writing about the same kind of things.
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FadingAqueous Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Its so sad but so sweet. Beautiful
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you. I appreciate it and I'm glad you liked it.
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FadingAqueous Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You are very welcome.
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Siveri Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2011  Student Writer
Beautiful. Thank you for sharing. (:
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you, that's very kind. I'm glad you liked it.
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NightRain-Chan Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011
...this reminds me of my brother and his friend...
my brother was the driver and his friend was in the passenger seat...
yeah, my bro died so this spoke to me really much.
thank you for this. <3
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2011  Student General Artist
I'm glad you could relate to the poem, but, not glad about the reason why you could.
I'm really sorry about your brother.
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NightRain-Chan Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2011
Thnxx but ya know, no matter how sorry ppl r, it'll never change so all i can do is live on without him ^^'
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SIlentHunters Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
Powerful piece this is, and one I will remember. It's really great.
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you very much, I really appreciate it and I'm glad you liked it.
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SIlentHunters Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
You are welcome.
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ReinaHW Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011   Writer
That is quite moving, reminds me of an old song by Terry Jacks called Seasons In The Sun, the original version that is, not the terrible remake from a boy band.
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you. I didn't know the song you were referring to, so I searched it and still didn't recognize it until the chorus, then I recognized it a little, it was from 1974 though, a bit before my time so that didn't surprise me. I listened all the way through and I can see why what I wrote reminded you of it, although was he singing about him dying or someone else, the lyrics did confuse me a bit?
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ReinaHW Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011   Writer
No wait, he didn't die, but the song is about someone who does and they say goodbye to those they love.
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ReinaHW Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011   Writer
Terry Jacks was singing about himself when the song was made, he died not long after, either by suicide or other means. The song is beautiful and very haunting in a way, it's one of the few songs that can make both me and my mum cry.
I've written some work to it.
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011  Student General Artist
I see, that is sad, and yeah, it is a very moving song, can't help thinking how different it would be if it were written and recorded today, probably screamo and not too moving! It's so odd how people can be effected so differently by music.
Only two songs make me honestly sad and close to tears and they are Hallelujah (Either the Jeff Buckley or Imogen Heap version, I never really liked the original), and a song called Eet by Regina Spektor, but, that's just me.
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ReinaHW Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011   Writer
If it were remade today it would likely be encouring some young female teen to tart herself up and make herself available to men, like a lot of songs seem to be about, or some really cheesy love song with no soul to it.

Some others songs are able to make me cry, one is Eyes On Me from Final Fantasy 8 and Melody Of Life from Final Fantasy 9, there's a beautiful piece of music from a game called Chrono Cross, it's called Dreaming Of The Shore Bordering Another World, I tend to find that piece of music quite powerful due to when it played early in the game after the main character comes across their grave after arriving in another universe, I tend to use the term 'Dream Of The Shore' often in my work.
Also the Aeris theme from Final Fantasy 7 is quite touching, and Sudeki Da De from Final Fantasy 10 is pretty powerful.
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SlimT Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Well..The form is FLAWLESS. I mean FLAWLESS. very powerful righting. perfect technique. zero access body fat rhythmic words, it draws you in and your not easily bored with it.

BUT the words you used were SO tiresome. you talked about how your best friend died which while sad is very common. You talk about heaven which is the most mainstream over used concept that exists, the whole poem was so predictable that I found myself able to narrate the whole thing after one quick glance.

what I DID like though was your fourth to bottom stanza. very real, very original.
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011  Student General Artist
I am feeling really mixed about your comment.

I guess firstly thank you for the comment on the form and technique of my writing, and I can take the critique about the words I used being tiresome. However, I don't really know how common it is for people to lose their best friends, but it is something that changed me unbelievably, and it's a huge part of me now. We write what we know, and this is something I know, it's important to me. And, heaven "the most mainstream and over used concept that exists", believing in that, is one of the only things that got me through it all, I don't know if it exists, but I'd like to believe it does, and I'm sure the idea of it helps a lot more people deal with the kind of situation I had to deal with too.

I'm glad you liked the last stanza, and I'm sorry if you found the rest of it repetitive and predictable. I appreciate your views, and your comments, but, I don't think I agree with all of them. Still, I can deal with that.
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SlimT Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
ok and seriously dude, I gave you the critique of the poem. it doesn't mean I don't respect what your going through. Idk if you thought it did but hey.
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chiara-scicluna Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This is so terribly sad, but beautifully written!
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s2-EnchantedRose-s2 Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2011   Photographer
Very sad and very beautifully written.
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you very much.
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s2-EnchantedRose-s2 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2011   Photographer
You're welcome. :)
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EmilyTheSpazz Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2011
Shit man. Deep. Really really deep. Like I feel like I lost someone when I read this. Dear god. This is amazing. I love it. I really really do.

I'm so sorry about your friend. T_T So sorry.
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you, on all accounts.
And I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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blue-marine Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2011
I kinda went out of my way when I chose poetry piece to comment on, but after reading this, I'm really glad I was able to catch something as emotional as this among loads of other art here on dA.
Rarely can a poem reach my soul like this one did (and I usually am more visual than literate type).

As someone said in comments already, this poem is not that much about style or rhyme or syllables, but about your emotions, feelings and pain you've managed to put in words in such refined way. As soon as I started reading the poem, I sympathized. Nothing like this happened to me, but I feel like I've too lost someone and also am about to loose someone, both very important, yet luckily still alive.
I think it is great you're able to portray your feelings like this, as painful as it may be, writing indeed is a pain-reliever in times like these.

You've put much thought and consideration into every verse, no matter what they're saying or how long they are. In a mere few words you've explained the reader what made your relationship with your friend so special. On a first look, it's what we all do with our friends, but on the other hand, you've put all those common things in such saddening context.

I hope that over time you'll be able to overcome this sadness and grief and live your life to the fullest with new friends, never forgetting those that used to be alongside you.
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you very much for everything you said.

I'm really glad you were able to feel the emotions this piece of writing was based around. Honestly, I'm still quite surprised so many people have even bothered to read this, it really means a lot whenever someone does, and especially when someone leaves a comment such as yours.

I really appreciate your comment, and also want to thank you very much for adding this to your favourites.
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blue-marine Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2011
I was glad to write a comment and put this song of yours into my favorites (I even believe it is first or at least among first ten literature works I've added to my favorites).

Keep living to the fullest!
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2011  Student General Artist
Well that means a lot, so thank you.

And, you too.
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Musango Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2011  Student Writer
Very moving. The language and ryhme flows so effortlessly, beautiful to read.
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you very much.
Thank you also for the favourite and the watch.
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Musango Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011  Student Writer
No problem at all...
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Miki-Aniki Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2011
I must say, I like this poem. It has nothing to do with the rhyming or the way it was written or expressed or set up. I like this poem because it seems like these are your real, raw feelings, whether we like it or not. I have a friend like that that I could absolutely not live without... So in conclusion, I like your poem. :aww:
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you.
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kittykittyhunter Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2011   Writer
I really liked the rhyme schemes.
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you, I kind of just wrote whatever felt right.
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NoLongerActive Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2011  Student General Artist
this was so moving.

i like the way you set up your poem, it has a song like flow when reading it.
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you.
I'm glad it reads well.
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AdmiralSilv Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Simplicity at its finest.
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B-U-Ts Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you.
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Ice-sister Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: so moving and just words can not descirbe how I now feel
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